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jon_chaisson) wrote2009-07-16 06:42 pm
jon_chaisson) wrote2009-07-16 06:42 pm
[LLB] Ouch!
Just got ![[livejournal.com profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/external/lj-userinfo.gif)
dancinghorse's critique back of Love Like Blood a few moments ago.
The Good:
--She likes the title. ;)
--Apparently I have "synopsis-fu". In all honesty I have to thank a few of you out there who helped me tighten it up a few years previous when I originally sent it out to JABberwocky. Still, glad to hear that!
The Bad:
--I desperately need an internal editor to cut all that excess crap.
--The problem with writing a Smartass Bostonian is that I seem to have also shown Gabriel as a raving dumbass and killed a lot of the drama with his goofiness.
--Good worldbuilding, but it needs a LOT of tightening.
Overall:
--Good, but DEFINITELY needs more work.
So YAY! and THANK YOU!!! todancinghorse for her great critique! I totally agree with a lot what she says, and I'll keep them in mind as I continue to clean it up and make it even better.
Back to the drawing board! ;)
dancinghorse's critique back of Love Like Blood a few moments ago.The Good:
--She likes the title. ;)
--Apparently I have "synopsis-fu". In all honesty I have to thank a few of you out there who helped me tighten it up a few years previous when I originally sent it out to JABberwocky. Still, glad to hear that!
The Bad:
--I desperately need an internal editor to cut all that excess crap.
--The problem with writing a Smartass Bostonian is that I seem to have also shown Gabriel as a raving dumbass and killed a lot of the drama with his goofiness.
--Good worldbuilding, but it needs a LOT of tightening.
Overall:
--Good, but DEFINITELY needs more work.
So YAY! and THANK YOU!!! to
dancinghorse for her great critique! I totally agree with a lot what she says, and I'll keep them in mind as I continue to clean it up and make it even better. Back to the drawing board! ;)