Just finished a first take of a query letter for A Division of Souls, the first in the trilogy.

Let me know what you think...the word count mentioned is a rough guess, as I haven't actually done a count in a while (I seem to remember it being more like 150k, but I do plan on doing a bit of pruning). I know it needs work, but any critiques and comments are of course helpful. :)

( Dear Sir or Madam, Will you read my book? It took me years to write, will you take a look? )